summer stream —
a mayfly breeding
shadows
February 2017
her ankles . . .
a path into mist's
endlessness
(Cattails Haiku Editor's Choice)
Editor's Comments
Hansha Teki’s beautiful haiku catches the reader’s imagination and attention with the first line and holds it as a lingering image with the use of ellipsis.
her ankles . . .
Where could this be leading? The poet leads us onto a path and the haiku effortlessly moves forward into the mist and beyond. The skilful use of the last word ‘endlessly’, leaves the reader with endless opportunities to interpret the poem in myriad ways. An open haiku with ample space for the reader to step in. Is it the mist of spring or is it the mist of autumn? Again, it is left to us, the readers.
- Geethanjali Rajan
I am now
in your third person
also present
pine lesson
it is what
it is not
autumn cloud
a sun dial measures
the time we lost
grassy field
vibrant with
wind's isness
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